my name? the ask me this all the time. they don't care for the answer they care to watch my form walk down a hallway. they care to watch my body move in a way that they find orgasmic they don't realize my mind and that i know what they look at. society has an obsession with the human form rather then intellect and my situation is no difrent. i am William Bellis: proud strong loyal and smart.
i spent my days singing and as much as i love it they saw me for that as a child. they heard my voice hit a note that few men could hit and people would listen to me only as i sang another person's thoughts and feelings. i was a fat child and the only way for someone to realize i was there was to show them notes and feelings i was too young to understand. i sang of love and treachery, pain and heartache, all something an 11 year old boy couldn't understand. i worked myself to sweat and tears hoping i would make them see i was more then the boy who could hit a note and make them feel another mans feelings.
now i am a man one with a mind, a heart and a soal all ready to show more then they see. i can be the life of a party but i need more then that i need to show that there is a mind behind my form. a heart behind my muscular chest and a soal that wants the world to see it. i have shed the pounds that confound me to my youth, confound me to an appalling stature one that couldn't be taken seriously. but now i must show the world that a mind hides behind the beauty of a human form. i am William bellis strong independent, and more then you may see. look at my mind over my matter
William,
ReplyDeleteVery creative post. You have a good flow to your writing. It also has humor and sincerity.
But it also has lots of grammar and spelling mistakes. Be sure to capitalize the start of new sentences, I's, and any other proper noun.
Also, check your spelling. The word SOUL is an important one. Heart is another (you have "hert" in your profile.
Take your time to check for these mistakes. Rushing through work will compromise your grades.
Also, your blog posts need to have pictures in them as well. You can just cut and paste. Some people embedded videos.
Take your time, be creative, and write professionally.
And you will do well.
GR: 85